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Simon Hot Tub Story

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Simon took off his hoodie and laid it aside, then slowly slipped his body down into the warm water of the hot tub.  He let out a long sigh, relaxing as he sank further into the nice hot water.  It felt good on his fur, and he was more than content to sit there, taking in the refreshing warmth that spread from the bottom of his feet to the tip of his tail.  

The concert tour had brought them to a secluded little ski lodge, up in the mountains somewhere, far away from the ravenous crowds and the omnipresent paparazzi.  He really didn't mind all of the attention, none of them did, Alvin least of all.  But Dave had said that sometimes it's necessary just to get away from it all for a little while in order to rest up and recharge, and Simon couldn't agree more.  So when Alvin and Theodore decided to go play in the snow outside the lodge, Simon decided it was the perfect opportunity for a little alone time.  

And what better way, he thought, to spend an afternoon to yourself than by relaxing in a tub full of steaming hot water.  He sighed deeply and slowly sank up to his chin.  For a split second, he found himself wondering what his brothers were up to right now.  It was all he could do to not imagine Alvin taking a snowball in the face, and he chuckled despite himself.  

He stiffened at the sound of someone sighing behind him, and nearly choked in the water.  He immediately recognized it as one of the girls.  His heart skipped a beat—he thought he would be alone in here.  Slowly he turned to see who it was.  

Standing a short ways off, her back turned to Simon, was Jeanette, idly humming a tune as she carefully folded a towel for herself next to a bench.  Simon's heart leapt to his throat at the sight of her, partially because he was always glad to see Jeanette, and partially because he knew what it was she was about to do.  

He didn't even have time to think.  He couldn't help but watch as she removed her denim jacket and laid it next to her towel by the bench.  He could feel his heart beating faster as she pulled her pink shirt up over her head, and finally pulled her skirt down to her feet, kicking it over onto her pile of clothes.  

Simon gulped hard.  He could see everything.  The subtle stripes on her back.  Her beautiful, silky smooth fur.  Her perfect, perky tail…  He felt wrong for looking, but at the same time…he just couldn't help himself.  

In his excitement, Simon hadn't realized that he had turned himself around in the tub to see her better, and was resting both paws on the edge of the tub as he watched.  In a bit of misfortune, one of his wet paws slipped, causing him to give way and utter a little grunt.  

Jeanette, previously unaware that anyone was in the room with her, instantly brought her arms up about herself, glancing feverishly around the room.  "W-who's there?" she stammered.

Trying to regain himself, Simon brought himself up again and made his presence known, but still stayed in the hot tub.  "It's me, Simon!"  

Jeanette looked over at him, and instinctively tried to cover herself again.  "Oh, hi Simon.  I-I didn't know anyone else was in here."  

"Heh, well, I was just, uh, trying out the hot tub," he replied with his usual awkward smile.

She giggled a bit, relaxing her arms.  "I see that."  

There followed a short silence before Simon spoke again.  "There's, uh, plenty of room in here if you'd, uh…maybe like to join me?"  Even as he spoke the words, Simon could feel his heart beating out of his chest.  

"Well, umm…"  She hesitated at first, but relaxed a bit when she saw that he, too, was without his clothing.  In truth, she was just as excited to see him in such a state as he was to see her.  So she smiled and said, "Alright."

A feeling of elation swept over Simon's entire body as he heard her speak those words.  He couldn't think of anything else to say, so he just moved over in the tub and allowed her room to come in.  She started by dipping only her toe into the water, then slowly lowered herself into the tub, even more slowly and deliberately than he had been.  When she finally settled herself in, only her head and shoulders were visible above the water.  

At first, they could only trade awkward glances at each other, the only form of communication they could muster up the nerve to make.  Simon occasionally stole another glance at her unclothed body through the rippling water, careful not to let her know what he was doing.  If he had only been paying closer attention, however, he would have noticed Jeanette doing the same.  

Just as the silence was transitioning from bashful to awkward, Simon gathered his courage, cleared his throat in a meaningful way, and opened his mouth to speak.  "So, um, what…uh, brings you here?"  He winced as he realized the stupidity of his own words.  

She just smiled demurely.  He really is cute that way, she thought to herself.  "Well, Brittany didn't feel like doing anything, and Eleanor went outside to play with Theodore, so…" she shrugged her shoulders.  "I figured I might as well do some exploring.  I went to the library first, looking for…someone to talk to."  She caught herself glancing in his direction as she said this, before quickly continuing.  "After that, I thought the hot tub sounded relaxing, so here I am."  She allowed herself to look in Simon's direction again, and noticed that he appeared to be studying her quite intently.  "What about you?" she probed.  

If Simon was being honest, he hadn't paid a bit of attention to what she had just said.  He was too busy taking in her face, watching the emotions flit across it like paint on a canvas, creating an elegant picture each and every time she moved.  But there was something that bothered him a little bit, something that seemed out of place.  "Jeanette, did you mean to leave your hair up in a bun?"

"What?"

"Your hair.  If you're trying to relax, I would think you would want to let your hair down, right?"

"I…suppose so," she said, instinctively reaching a hand up to her carefully pulled-up hair.  "I guess I just didn't really feel the need to let it down.  Ellie fixed it for me this morning, and I'd hate to undo it just yet."  

"Hmm."  It seemed like an honest answer, but he wondered if there wasn't more to it than that.  He decided not to push it, though.  "You seem pretty close with your sisters."

She chuckled a bit.  "Well of course, I love my sisters!  I don't know what I would do without them.  Though, I admit, sometimes I do get a bit—" She stopped short, as though she had come close to revealing some vital secret.  She cast her eyes downward, and almost shamefully finished her thought.  "Well…a bit lonely, I suppose."

"Lonely?" Simon exclaimed.  "How could living with two sisters ever be lonely?"

"It's not really what it sounds like!" she quickly covered, more nervous than she ought to be.  "I mean, we do all kinds of things together, as a family—we listen to music, we practice our singing and our dancing together, we always share our meals.  But sometimes I just feel like…like—ooh, I don't know!  I just—I just really wish I hadn't said it, I—"

"Hey, hey!  It's alright!" Simon said as he reached out a paw and placed it reassuringly on her bare shoulder.  She instantly fell silent at his touch, and listened with keenest intent as he continued to talk.  "Don't worry, you don't have to tell me if you don't want to.  I was just asking."  As he spoke, he could feel the tension in her body melting away until she became more or less relaxed once more.  

She took a sharp intake of breath as he removed his paw from her shoulder, as though she had forgotten to breathe while he was touching her.  "Thanks, Simon," she whispered breathlessly.  

Simon smiled nervously.  "I didn't mean to make you uncomfortable—"

"Oh, no no no!  You didn't do anything wrong!  I promise."

"Well then…what is it?"

She was hesitant, he could tell.  There was something she needed to get off her chest, but she just wasn't sure of the best way to go about it.  After a few quiet moments, she took a deep breath and started to speak.  "Well, like I said before, we're a family, which is something I never, ever take for granted.  But when your family is as close as ours, it's hard not to compare yourself sometimes.  It's not really a popularity thing—Brittany enjoys the spotlight, but I don't begrudge her that one bit.  And Ellie's happy just so long as everyone else is happy.  But sometimes I wonder, just where does that leave me?  My sisters love me very much, I know, and I love them too…but sometimes I just feel so…"

"…Alone?"

She looked up at him, and he could see that her eyes were a little misty.  She quickly lowered her head again, and spoke in a whisper that was barely audible.  "Yeah…something like that."

Simon looked down in thought.  He could see where she was coming from.  He had the best brothers in the world, and he wouldn't trade them for anything, but sometimes he wished there was someone who better understood him, as an individual, someone who shared the same thoughts, the same interests…the same desires.  

He looked over at Jeanette again, and noticed her head was still lowered.  He looked closer, and saw the tears in the corners of her eyes.    

"Jeanette?  Are you okay?" he said, reaching out a hand to her.  

She didn't move.  "Can I—can I tell you a secret?"

"Of course," he replied, scooting closer to her.    

"Well, normally I'm not very comfortable around people other than my sisters.  I get all flustered and shy, and I never know what to say.  But, ever since I met you…whenever I'm around you, I don't feel that way.  You make me feel…like I'm not alone anymore."

She looked up at him again, and this time she looked directly into his brilliant blue eyes.  "I guess, what I'm trying to say is…is that I like you, Simon.  I like you a lot.  Do you…like me, too?"

He could practically hear his heart thumping through his chest as she finished speaking.  He leaned in closer, and took a deep breath.  "Jeanette?"

She leaned in closer too, until they were practically shoulder-to-shoulder.  "Yes, Simon?"

"Why don't you go ahead and let your hair down?"

She remained very still, didn't move at all, and to the casual onlooker it would seem as though she were taken aback by his response.  But behind those delicate purple frames, Simon watched as her eyes betrayed her true feelings.  Gazing into her beautiful blue irises, he could see the excitement, the relief, the joy, and the passion all flitter through her eyes at once.  He knew beyond the shadow of a doubt that she had understood his meaning.  She turned around in her seat to face him proper, and without saying a word, reached her dripping hands up to her hair.  She gave a tug, and he watched as her hair fell into place around the back and side of her head.  She ran her hands through it once, shook it a little for good measure, and faced the Chipmunk sitting beside her.  "Well?" she asked, anxiously.  

Simon gulped hard, and said the first thing that came to his mind.  "I think you're the most beautiful girl I've ever seen."  

And with tears in their eyes, they embraced each other, holding on tight to the one person that they now knew could make them feel whole.  And all the while, Simon kept whispering this simple phrase into her ear:  "I like you, too."
Oy vei…if only I felt as confident with dialogue as with my descriptions. If that were the case, I could probably have made this one a lot better.

I’ve never really written one of those metaphorical, read-between-the-lines scenarios before, so this is my first real attempt at trying to express something without actually saying it. I fear I may have also interjected myself a bit too much into this piece, rather than staying true to the characters as they are. I’ll let you guys decide that one.

On the subject of the Chipmunks being and perceiving each other as “naked,” I have this to say: Even though they don’t have anything to cover up (or that they haven’t already shown everything anyway over the course of the first two movies), I was operating on the pretense that they do still have a sense of modesty. Besides, if you think about it, the Chipmunks and the Chipettes have never seen each other “naked” before, so it kinda makes sense that they would react this way. Nothing—I repeat, NOTHING—sexual was ever intended, but rather an innocent case of curious fascination.

But by and large, I’m quite proud of this piece and what I’ve accomplished with it. Comments and critiques are always welcome, but more than anything, I hope you enjoy!


P.S. I’m not really sure if ski lodges have libraries in them or not, but let’s just say that they do.

P.P.S. I seriously cannot think of a proper title for this. Any suggestions are welcome!
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Like others have said, this is probably the best (CGI) chipmunk - okay, I've only read CGI chipmunk stories since those are the only chipmunks I'm familiar with, but not very many - story that I've read. I'm surprised that no one said in the comments that you should write similar stories involving Alvin and Brittany and Theodore and Eleanor. If you have time, do you think it is possible you could write stories like this (not exactly hot tub, unless you want to, maybe something else) involving Alvin and Brittany (preferably this one first, since Brittany is my favorite charater) and Theodore and Eleanor.